noorie
Here is a short story I wrote, kinda inspired by the song MOTBQ. It is 2 pages long, so goes on to 2 entries. With a twist at the end. Hope you all like it.. (Thanks Walter!)
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noorie
No wrong, no right
I’m gonna tell you there’s no black and no white.
(Queen: One Vision)
I’m gonna tell you there’s no black and no white.
(Queen: One Vision)
Thistle
Was this your creative writing thread? Why did you take it down?
Wanted to say I read it, and found lots of positives in your writing: you have an obvious passion for it that oozes through, and know how to paint a very vivid picture. Tonnes of alliteration in there kept the tempo up, and the story had a very dark twist (I kinda had an idea that Romeo was getting done in, but didn't see the last part coming lol). An old story gone modern day bad-ass was a good idea, and that could easily have been expanded. Need to ask if you're a fan of Meat Loaf, as I was getting some Bat Out Of Hell vibes from that?
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Wanted to say I read it, and found lots of positives in your writing: you have an obvious passion for it that oozes through, and know how to paint a very vivid picture. Tonnes of alliteration in there kept the tempo up, and the story had a very dark twist (I kinda had an idea that Romeo was getting done in, but didn't see the last part coming lol). An old story gone modern day bad-ass was a good idea, and that could easily have been expanded. Need to ask if you're a fan of Meat Loaf, as I was getting some Bat Out Of Hell vibes from that?
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noorie
Walter, thanks for reading it!
Fact is, I removed it because I am way too chicken! I love to write, but so far I have shown my stories only to my family, and one friend who suggested I put one up on QZ. But it is not really about Queen, so I took it off. Like I said - chicken!
Yes, I do like me some Meat Loaf, but not extremely so. I just have a very dark sense of humour, yet with an underlying thread of true love..? Perhaps that is what reminded you of Bat out of Hell? .
Fact is, I removed it because I am way too chicken! I love to write, but so far I have shown my stories only to my family, and one friend who suggested I put one up on QZ. But it is not really about Queen, so I took it off. Like I said - chicken!
Yes, I do like me some Meat Loaf, but not extremely so. I just have a very dark sense of humour, yet with an underlying thread of true love..? Perhaps that is what reminded you of Bat out of Hell? .
Thistle
^ that was exactly the vibe! Btw, doesn't need to be about Queen to be on the personal forum, so don't feel daft about putting it up. And don't be chicken - it was good!!
Thistle
That's the spirit ;)
ParisNair
This was good, very good. I could visualize every scene. If Tarantino could see this, he may be tempted to bring it to the silver screen.
shannaschaffer
Nice work :) I am jealous of anyone who can write well. I'm lucky to string a few words together to make a coherent sentence some days...
Djdownsy
That was a very good read, I'm a fan of short stories and that appealed to me in that way! :)
Missreclusive
Noorie! Nice work. I wasn't going to read it but started and couldn't stop... Hey, grace us with more please. Gotta love a dark sense of humour.