Because so many of you (well, QOW and Ravenetta) have requested my novel to be posted on QZ, here is the first chapter. I would love some opinions (even if they are negative, as long as they are constructive). Enjoy!
http://munchsacksnovel.queenzone.com/
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Yeah, all right! Ill read it soon. Now, about that interesting wednesday?! Youre 2 behind!
You're never satisfied, are you?
Could you do an autographed copy for us??
This is all well and good, but still no feedback.
After reading the first chapter, i do feel it has some suspense to build hopefully within the next chapter.
I like the way you make a kind of 'cliff-hanger' at the end so its much more of an attraction to readers and sets a desire to read to the next chapter.
Hopefully, in the next chapter, you've described this 'parallel universe' abit more but i do like the way you haven't gone into that aspect in depth so this can create a element of arousing mystery.
I think its quite fab so far, for someone of 15!
I like the way you make a kind of 'cliff-hanger' at the end so its much more of an attraction to readers and sets a desire to read to the next chapter.
Hopefully, in the next chapter, you've described this 'parallel universe' abit more but i do like the way you haven't gone into that aspect in depth so this can create a element of arousing mystery.
I think its quite fab so far, for someone of 15!
Thanks, Flash! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and tell me what you thought and I am also pleased you like it. Will post next chapter soon. Until then, just that cliffhanger.
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Munchsack wrote: [/QUOTENAME]
Thanks, Flash! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and tell me what you thought and I am also pleased you like it. Will post next chapter soon. Until then, just that cliffhanger.[/QUOTE]
You're welcome, dear!
*hangs on cliff* Do hurry though, i don't think i can hang on much longer before i plunge onto the jagged rocks and shatter my spine! Ouch.
Thanks, Flash! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and tell me what you thought and I am also pleased you like it. Will post next chapter soon. Until then, just that cliffhanger.[/QUOTE]
You're welcome, dear!
*hangs on cliff* Do hurry though, i don't think i can hang on much longer before i plunge onto the jagged rocks and shatter my spine! Ouch.
They all get sucked into a parallel universe and are killed by the sudden pressure change.
THE END
THE END
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Munchsack wrote: [/QUOTENAME]
They all get sucked into a parallel universe and are killed by the sudden pressure change.
THE END[/QUOTE]
Great! Always put a death in a weird novel!
They all get sucked into a parallel universe and are killed by the sudden pressure change.
THE END[/QUOTE]
Great! Always put a death in a weird novel!
That was sreal good,when'll the 2nd chapter be posted,I want to know what happens
See above, ending spoiled.
No, probably next week if I can write the whole thing in time.
No, probably next week if I can write the whole thing in time.
Sorry it hasn't been updated yet, was supposed to be today. Haven't had time. Sorry.