The Queen 2 Novel

**chews fingernails and kicks legs back**

I like it. I especially like your descriptions of Luce and the other characters.

I also thought it was just plain old funny how the apothecary man was just lying in the dirt, haw.

I should try reviving my Fairy Feller story, but...eh.

[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]childwhoevery1hates wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Thank you, ladymercury but...
I need MORE FEEDBACK!! *Salivates all over keyboard out of sheer lack of appraisal from other queenzoners*
Everyone says these forums are boring and when I tried to post my story, no one bothers to read...??
I can't make my writing better if no one says anything about it![/QUOTE]

I just read it, I *love* it! :-D You created the perfect atmosphere to your story, and atmosphere is everything!

**sobs**

Just one thing: this is more of a PLAY than a novel. It's 99.9% dialogue!

^I hope that isn't a bad thing...

I've read at least one novella which is entirely in dialogue.

ETA - It's not a bad thing. You have your dialogue tags. My suggestion is to cut down on the dialogue tags to make it all go faster.

And please, oh PLEASE put line spaces between dialogue, just like they do in books. When something is all crowded up like this, I don't read. It's too much trouble.

(Well, I usually don't read other stuff, anyway).


:)

If you all would like, I'll post my next chapter tonight

I'm sorry I was just trying to get all of the stuff to fit...

It's just a suggestion. And you're not the only one I've ever seen do it, and this is not the only fandom where I've seen it.

Oh! I know what the problem is; I did put spaces on the word document but they showed up very small on the post in this thread.
Anyway, would anyone like to read the next chapter?! I swear it's not all this serious...