I was thinking today of the good times we had
Back in the days when I was a little lad
The days were heaven and filled with bliss
But now my heart does miss
The laughter, the singing, the fun
The sky was blue, the grass was pure
Surely this happiness could not endure
All the untold horrors to come
Could surely for now just kiss my bum.
When I used to wake up and jump out of bed
I begun to get excited about the day ahead
Brush my teeth, comb my hair
To be late I simply did not dare
I rushed out of the house. I had to be on time
To do not would be a crime
Rush into the playground, await the bell
What would happen today, who could tell?
But now those days are all long away
I wish I could go back for just a day
But these special memories are still here
And to me they are more than dear.
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Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]the_hero wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]the_hero wrote: [/QUOTENAME]That's a nice piece of work dreamingqueen. Any story behind it? :-)[/QUOTE]
thanks! :-) i try... not very successful usually... but thanks! :-D
well what kind of story do you see? [/QUOTE]
That you worry too much about something you've lost in the past that time flies without giving you any answers[/QUOTE]
Well thats one of its sub-texts yes...
Which actually was not what i was intending when i wrote it, but it ended that way...
But mainly its about how sometimes there are things you want to happen soon, and you think about them alot... that sometimes it keeps you up at night...
You feel like some kind of wanderer, looking waiting for love and something good to happen...
And sometimes you think youre willing to take a risk, but the consequences are greater than the rewards...
So you play scenarios over and over in your mind, you want to move on in life, but there are certain things that you dont want to let go...
And relationships...
thanks! :-) i try... not very successful usually... but thanks! :-D
well what kind of story do you see? [/QUOTE]
That you worry too much about something you've lost in the past that time flies without giving you any answers[/QUOTE]
Well thats one of its sub-texts yes...
Which actually was not what i was intending when i wrote it, but it ended that way...
But mainly its about how sometimes there are things you want to happen soon, and you think about them alot... that sometimes it keeps you up at night...
You feel like some kind of wanderer, looking waiting for love and something good to happen...
And sometimes you think youre willing to take a risk, but the consequences are greater than the rewards...
So you play scenarios over and over in your mind, you want to move on in life, but there are certain things that you dont want to let go...
And relationships...
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P[/QUOTE]
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT!
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT!
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P[/QUOTE]
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Nathan The No. 1 Gentleman wrote: [/QUOTENAME]I was thinking today of the good times we had
Back in the days when I was a little lad
The days were heaven and filled with bliss
But now my heart does miss
The laughter, the singing, the fun
The sky was blue, the grass was pure
Surely this happiness could not endure
All the untold horrors to come
Could surely for now just kiss my bum.
When I used to wake up and jump out of bed
I begun to get excited about the day ahead
Brush my teeth, comb my hair
To be late I simply did not dare
I rushed out of the house. I had to be on time
To do not would be a crime
Rush into the playground, await the bell
What would happen today, who could tell?
But now those days are all long away
I wish I could go back for just a day
But these special memories are still here
And to me they are more than dear.
[/QUOTE]
Wow, you are a poet too :o... I liked it :D
Back in the days when I was a little lad
The days were heaven and filled with bliss
But now my heart does miss
The laughter, the singing, the fun
The sky was blue, the grass was pure
Surely this happiness could not endure
All the untold horrors to come
Could surely for now just kiss my bum.
When I used to wake up and jump out of bed
I begun to get excited about the day ahead
Brush my teeth, comb my hair
To be late I simply did not dare
I rushed out of the house. I had to be on time
To do not would be a crime
Rush into the playground, await the bell
What would happen today, who could tell?
But now those days are all long away
I wish I could go back for just a day
But these special memories are still here
And to me they are more than dear.
[/QUOTE]
Wow, you are a poet too :o... I liked it :D
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P[/QUOTE]
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers!
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers!
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P[/QUOTE]
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers! [/QUOTE]
DEAL!!
i'll post some depressing ones if you do :P haha,i had some funny poems i wrote years ago but i just dunno where they are,i can't find em, but i do know where the sad ones are!
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers! [/QUOTE]
DEAL!!
i'll post some depressing ones if you do :P haha,i had some funny poems i wrote years ago but i just dunno where they are,i can't find em, but i do know where the sad ones are!
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME][QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Aw, i like that poem too! It's weird cuz i was about to write a poem about 'back in the day' yesterday, but i didn't. good poem :P[/QUOTE]
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers! [/QUOTE]
DEAL!!
i'll post some depressing ones if you do :P haha,i had some funny poems i wrote years ago but i just dunno where they are,i can't find em, but i do know where the sad ones are![/QUOTE]
okie dokie! Sounds like a plan stan!
Cool! Write it anyways lol if ya wanna...
AND NATHAN... I LOVED IT! [/QUOTE]
haha, i tried but i just couldn't think of anything. Nathan's was too good xDxD! it's hard for me to write poems that aren't really depressing.
And, DreaminQueen, i really love your poems too. i especially like the style you wrote it in xD[/QUOTE]
Awww, thats ok. Well if you ever get the writing bug, please post! :-D
Yea, ive got some depressing ones too... i'll post one if you will...
Thanks dear, im glad you like them. I dont like them at all (mine i mean) but im glad someone does! :-D
Cheers! [/QUOTE]
DEAL!!
i'll post some depressing ones if you do :P haha,i had some funny poems i wrote years ago but i just dunno where they are,i can't find em, but i do know where the sad ones are![/QUOTE]
okie dokie! Sounds like a plan stan!
Battered Heart
grief that lies awake day and night
a premature love dissipates from sight
aches of a pain greater than my heart can hold
smiling lips turn blue, the glow gone cold
thrown back into my dystopian life
by the one who had pulled me from the ice
snuffed the ember as fast as it was made
mislead down a path that you let fade
a wilted rose blackened by vile truth
flesh scolded by my gullible youth
thunder that echoes internal rage
eyes of sorrow mirrored by this moistened page
in an overcrowded world, I'm just another face
an isipid being easily replaced
etiolating body lies still on the bed
battered heart beats despite being dead
soaking in the blood of your lying tongue
tortured by your neglect, my neck wrung
the dream had warned me, the nightmare came true
I'm really nothing but a bete noire to you
you made it feel mutual, a perfect match
then brushed me aside and locked the latch
now I disappear demolished by dispair
yet this heart loves you though you'd never care
grief that lies awake day and night
a premature love dissipates from sight
aches of a pain greater than my heart can hold
smiling lips turn blue, the glow gone cold
thrown back into my dystopian life
by the one who had pulled me from the ice
snuffed the ember as fast as it was made
mislead down a path that you let fade
a wilted rose blackened by vile truth
flesh scolded by my gullible youth
thunder that echoes internal rage
eyes of sorrow mirrored by this moistened page
in an overcrowded world, I'm just another face
an isipid being easily replaced
etiolating body lies still on the bed
battered heart beats despite being dead
soaking in the blood of your lying tongue
tortured by your neglect, my neck wrung
the dream had warned me, the nightmare came true
I'm really nothing but a bete noire to you
you made it feel mutual, a perfect match
then brushed me aside and locked the latch
now I disappear demolished by dispair
yet this heart loves you though you'd never care
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]Queen are the Champions wrote: [/QUOTENAME] Battered Heart
grief that lies awake day and night
a premature love dissipates from sight
aches of a pain greater than my heart can hold
smiling lips turn blue, the glow gone cold
thrown back into my dystopian life
by the one who had pulled me from the ice
snuffed the ember as fast as it was made
mislead down a path that you let fade
a wilted rose blackened by vile truth
flesh scolded by my gullible youth
thunder that echoes internal rage
eyes of sorrow mirrored by this moistened page
in an overcrowded world, I'm just another face
an isipid being easily replaced
etiolating body lies still on the bed
battered heart beats despite being dead
soaking in the blood of your lying tongue
tortured by your neglect, my neck wrung
the dream had warned me, the nightmare came true
I'm really nothing but a bete noire to you
you made it feel mutual, a perfect match
then brushed me aside and locked the latch
now I disappear demolished by dispair
yet this heart loves you though you'd never care[/QUOTE]
although its supposed to be depressing. Its got a beautifully truthfulness about it. I liked it very much. You have quite a way with words...
Excellent...
grief that lies awake day and night
a premature love dissipates from sight
aches of a pain greater than my heart can hold
smiling lips turn blue, the glow gone cold
thrown back into my dystopian life
by the one who had pulled me from the ice
snuffed the ember as fast as it was made
mislead down a path that you let fade
a wilted rose blackened by vile truth
flesh scolded by my gullible youth
thunder that echoes internal rage
eyes of sorrow mirrored by this moistened page
in an overcrowded world, I'm just another face
an isipid being easily replaced
etiolating body lies still on the bed
battered heart beats despite being dead
soaking in the blood of your lying tongue
tortured by your neglect, my neck wrung
the dream had warned me, the nightmare came true
I'm really nothing but a bete noire to you
you made it feel mutual, a perfect match
then brushed me aside and locked the latch
now I disappear demolished by dispair
yet this heart loves you though you'd never care[/QUOTE]
although its supposed to be depressing. Its got a beautifully truthfulness about it. I liked it very much. You have quite a way with words...
Excellent...
ok, as our Deal stated, heres one of mine... This is god awful....
--Untitled--
As I lay awake
I long for the next
Destraction
Beacuse my dreams
Will reveal
What kills me daily
Taunting me
like a sunfilled rainstorm
Of what my soul longs for
And my hearts obsession
The touch, the butterflies
The simple action
The complicated result.
As I sleep
My dreams play on
Like an endless movie
Its the love song on
Replay
The unforgettable lyics
Ringing on and on
As the chords fade in and out
Continuously
Creates unexplainable emotions
Slowly the tears flow
Is it from sheer beauty
Or pain of this scene
Beauty at the thought
Pain at the reality
Of this fictious lie
As i reach
For that knife
I am numb
To things around me
Spinning in the lies
Blurred are the truths
No right
No wrong, just blind.
As i become aware
Of what i've done
The blood drips
Along the line i've made
As i cry
No one comes to save my sould
To tell me I'm
Beautiful
To wip the tears away
And to steal the pain
As i fell
Into pieces
I asked forgiveness
As well as truth
To see the errors in me
As i wait
For the answers
I sleep
Only to find
More questions
And the pieces of my broken self
Caught in the re-living
Of ficticious lies
I created
In mine eyes...
--Untitled--
As I lay awake
I long for the next
Destraction
Beacuse my dreams
Will reveal
What kills me daily
Taunting me
like a sunfilled rainstorm
Of what my soul longs for
And my hearts obsession
The touch, the butterflies
The simple action
The complicated result.
As I sleep
My dreams play on
Like an endless movie
Its the love song on
Replay
The unforgettable lyics
Ringing on and on
As the chords fade in and out
Continuously
Creates unexplainable emotions
Slowly the tears flow
Is it from sheer beauty
Or pain of this scene
Beauty at the thought
Pain at the reality
Of this fictious lie
As i reach
For that knife
I am numb
To things around me
Spinning in the lies
Blurred are the truths
No right
No wrong, just blind.
As i become aware
Of what i've done
The blood drips
Along the line i've made
As i cry
No one comes to save my sould
To tell me I'm
Beautiful
To wip the tears away
And to steal the pain
As i fell
Into pieces
I asked forgiveness
As well as truth
To see the errors in me
As i wait
For the answers
I sleep
Only to find
More questions
And the pieces of my broken self
Caught in the re-living
Of ficticious lies
I created
In mine eyes...
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]DreaminQueen wrote: [/QUOTENAME]ok, as our Deal stated, heres one of mine... This is god awful....
--Untitled--
As I lay awake
I long for the next
Destraction
Beacuse my dreams
Will reveal
What kills me daily
Taunting me
like a sunfilled rainstorm
Of what my soul longs for
And my hearts obsession
The touch, the butterflies
The simple action
The complicated result.
As I sleep
My dreams play on
Like an endless movie
Its the love song on
Replay
The unforgettable lyics
Ringing on and on
As the chords fade in and out
Continuously
Creates unexplainable emotions
Slowly the tears flow
Is it from sheer beauty
Or pain of this scene
Beauty at the thought
Pain at the reality
Of this fictious lie
As i reach
For that knife
I am numb
To things around me
Spinning in the lies
Blurred are the truths
No right
No wrong, just blind.
As i become aware
Of what i've done
The blood drips
Along the line i've made
As i cry
No one comes to save my sould
To tell me I'm
Beautiful
To wip the tears away
And to steal the pain
As i fell
Into pieces
I asked forgiveness
As well as truth
To see the errors in me
As i wait
For the answers
I sleep
Only to find
More questions
And the pieces of my broken self
Caught in the re-living
Of ficticious lies
I created
In mine eyes...
[/QUOTE]
Yea, i put up one of the less depressing poems i have. I'm glad you liked it!
Wow, I loved your poem too!! Very expressive, you definitely have a way with words yourself! Well worth the deal we made! ;)
--Untitled--
As I lay awake
I long for the next
Destraction
Beacuse my dreams
Will reveal
What kills me daily
Taunting me
like a sunfilled rainstorm
Of what my soul longs for
And my hearts obsession
The touch, the butterflies
The simple action
The complicated result.
As I sleep
My dreams play on
Like an endless movie
Its the love song on
Replay
The unforgettable lyics
Ringing on and on
As the chords fade in and out
Continuously
Creates unexplainable emotions
Slowly the tears flow
Is it from sheer beauty
Or pain of this scene
Beauty at the thought
Pain at the reality
Of this fictious lie
As i reach
For that knife
I am numb
To things around me
Spinning in the lies
Blurred are the truths
No right
No wrong, just blind.
As i become aware
Of what i've done
The blood drips
Along the line i've made
As i cry
No one comes to save my sould
To tell me I'm
Beautiful
To wip the tears away
And to steal the pain
As i fell
Into pieces
I asked forgiveness
As well as truth
To see the errors in me
As i wait
For the answers
I sleep
Only to find
More questions
And the pieces of my broken self
Caught in the re-living
Of ficticious lies
I created
In mine eyes...
[/QUOTE]
Yea, i put up one of the less depressing poems i have. I'm glad you liked it!
Wow, I loved your poem too!! Very expressive, you definitely have a way with words yourself! Well worth the deal we made! ;)
Why the hell can't I right stuff like this... :-S
[QUOTE][QUOTENAME]<font color="#FF00FF">its_a_hard_life wrote: [/QUOTENAME]Why the hell can't I right stuff like this... :-S[/QUOTE]
because you listen to nirvana
because you listen to nirvana